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Sunday, May 15, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday

Hey beautiful people!

Thank goodness Blogger is up and running today. Haven't been able to get on for the past couple of days and it's a huge relief to find everything working normally today.

Gotta say I'm getting addicted to posting out these little snippets for Six Sentence Sunday. Lol, no one said it gets this addictive, something you just have to do, and that you wait for every week. I hope these tidbits make you peeps happy too. :)

So, without further ado, here's today's six. Remember last week how Kelsey dropped the bombshell as to why she was back into Stellan's life? Well, here follows a snip of the conversation that follows, deep into Stellan's POV, after Kelsey has confirmed that she gave birth to their daughter. For the purpose of Six Sentences, I have tweaked it a little so the gist of the scene is conveyed.

Enjoy!


'...For eighteen years, he hadn’t known he had a child. She was a grown girl now, a young woman, who had just given birth herself to a preemie.
“Where is she?”


“Gone.”

The word was a whisper that sent pointed knife-edges to slash-dance across his spine.
“She, Sophie,” Kelsey’s voice tore on a sob, “she died.”...'


I always forget to add this, but not today - Find out more about Six Sentence Sunday here and check out all the amazing entries listed up again this week.

From Mauritius with love,

Zee
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53 comments:

  1. Anonymous15 May 2011 at 17:06

    Oh my, I just teared up. Poignant and tragic.

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  2. Rebecca Royce15 May 2011 at 17:48

    AHHHHH. Z, you can't leave us like that.

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  3. Sandy15 May 2011 at 18:08

    Oh my gosh, Zee, that's strong writing.

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  4. Cate Masters15 May 2011 at 18:30

    Wow, an emotion-packed snippet. Excellent job, and the last sentence really packs a punch.

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  5. Liia Ann White15 May 2011 at 19:31

    Ugh no! Don't leave us hanging. It's so tragic, I need to know more.

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  6. Zee Monodee15 May 2011 at 20:09

    Graylin,

    Very tragic indeed. My heart goes out to Stellan every time I think of him.

    Thanks for dropping by!

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  7. Zee Monodee15 May 2011 at 20:10

    Sorry Rebecca. :) More next week, maybe?

    Hugs!

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  8. Zee Monodee15 May 2011 at 20:10

    Thanks Sandy! I'm working towards that aim.

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  9. Zee Monodee15 May 2011 at 20:11

    Thank you, Cate! I'm glad the emotion came across.

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  10. Zee Monodee15 May 2011 at 20:11

    Liia, more next week, I promise!

    Thanks for dropping by. :)

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  11. Cherie Marks15 May 2011 at 20:12

    Very emotional. Good SSS.

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  12. sue15 May 2011 at 20:37

    yes it is addictive - emotional write

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  13. Carolyn Rosewood15 May 2011 at 20:38

    Tragic! I want to read more!

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  14. Zee Monodee15 May 2011 at 21:08

    Thanks Cherie!

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  15. Zee Monodee15 May 2011 at 21:08

    Sue, I totally need my 'fix' every Sunday now, lol.

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  16. Zee Monodee15 May 2011 at 21:09

    Carolyn, I promise to have more next week. :)

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  17. Viviane Brentanos15 May 2011 at 21:12

    Lovely emotional filled six.

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  18. Zee Monodee15 May 2011 at 21:19

    Thanks Viviane!!

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  19. Taryn Kincaid15 May 2011 at 21:32

    Oh, shocking. So sad for him that he never knew and now will never know his daughter. Hope he gets a chance with the granddaughter.

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  20. Sandy Nachlinger15 May 2011 at 21:35

    Touching scene, and well written. I like the fact that Kelsey and Stellan are older. A similar situation between long-lost lovers occurs in my book!

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  21. Zee Monodee15 May 2011 at 21:53

    Taryn, yes - it's a heartbreaker that he won't ever know his daughter. But life is about second chances too, and their grandaughter is one such opportunity.

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  22. Zee Monodee15 May 2011 at 21:54

    Thanks Sandy. Yes, both of them are older and world-wise, though they come from two different social universes. I love long-lost lovers' stories. :)

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  23. Unknown15 May 2011 at 21:54

    A real heart-string tugger. Great six.

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  24. Gem Sivad15 May 2011 at 21:58

    Oh, this is so sad--and what a great set up for a rekindled love story. The reader in my weeps, the author is nodding her head.

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  25. Jessica Knauss15 May 2011 at 22:08

    I hope he's misinterpreted, and she's not dead... Too sad!

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  26. Jayel Kaye15 May 2011 at 22:46

    just rip my heart out and stomp all over it. That's powerful stuff

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  27. Felicia Rogers15 May 2011 at 23:20

    How sad! I hope the implied information isn't true.

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  28. Susanna Fraser15 May 2011 at 23:37

    Oh, how heartwrenching.

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  29. AllureVanSanz15 May 2011 at 23:42

    Heartbreaking, tragic... a perfect nightmare--which lets you know, it's well written.

    Good job.
    Best,
    Allure

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  30. Misa Buckley16 May 2011 at 01:13

    Sad six :(

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  31. JoAnne Kenrick16 May 2011 at 01:58

    Oh, Zee..how sad xx and my, my, my.. pointed knife-edges to slash-dance across his spine love that line!

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  32. Anonymous16 May 2011 at 01:59

    My goodness. So much sadness in a few words. Nicely done, even if it did make me cry.

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  33. Kim16 May 2011 at 03:26

    How sad... a powerful six, indeed.

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  34. lexcade16 May 2011 at 04:28

    That's so sad... Wow. Great six, Zee!!

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  35. Lindsay16 May 2011 at 05:29

    Sad. To find then maybe lose. Great six

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  36. Alison16 May 2011 at 05:47

    wow! I wanted to shake my netbook as yell NOW WHAT!

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  37. Zee Monodee16 May 2011 at 09:25

    Thank you, Ginger!

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  38. Zee Monodee16 May 2011 at 09:26

    Gem, I had to force myself to put them across this situation. I think I fell in love with Stellan at this precise moment.

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  39. Zee Monodee16 May 2011 at 09:34

    Jessica, unfortunately it's the truth. Yes, sad indeed.

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  40. Zee Monodee16 May 2011 at 09:35

    Jayel, it's a hard blow, innit? Anyone in his shoes would reel.

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  41. Zee Monodee16 May 2011 at 09:36

    Felicia, unfortunately their daughter did die. Her death and its consequences are what bring them together again.

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  42. Zee Monodee16 May 2011 at 09:36

    Susanna, it tore me up to write this scene.

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  43. Zee Monodee16 May 2011 at 09:36

    Thanks, Allure. :)

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  44. Zee Monodee16 May 2011 at 09:37

    Misa, my heart breaks every time I re-read this scene.

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  45. Zee Monodee16 May 2011 at 09:37

    Thanks JoAnne. It's heartwrenching, innit? I so feel for that poor man.

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  46. Zee Monodee16 May 2011 at 09:38

    Dianne, sorry to have me you actually cry. But yes, I wanted this scene to be gut and heart wrenching - glad it came through.

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  47. Zee Monodee16 May 2011 at 09:38

    Thank you, Kim!

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  48. Zee Monodee16 May 2011 at 09:38

    Thanks Lex!

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  49. Zee Monodee16 May 2011 at 09:39

    Lindsay, exactly - his daughter was just beyond his reach for a few minutes, only to be snatched away again.

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  50. Zee Monodee16 May 2011 at 09:40

    @the cautionary tale,

    Oops! I hope the netbook is okay.:) I'll have more coming next week.

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  51. Anonymous17 May 2011 at 06:11

    So sad and beautifully written. Great six, Zee!

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  52. Zee Monodee17 May 2011 at 09:29

    Thanks laynap!

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  53. Unknown17 May 2011 at 18:21

    Your writing always makes my heart thump a little faster....so good Zee!

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