Sunday, July 22, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday: Before The Morning #13 - Aftermath of a Kill

Hey beautiful people!

It's a calm, quiet Sunday morning here, and for once it's not that blustery cold (though my nose decided to start a competition with my stack of handkerchiefs, as in, how many handkerchiefs can I blow through with this running nose?) Anyhow, things looking good, quiet, and peaceful... For how long, I have no clue, but I'll take it. And this works great because it's the weekend and time for Six Sentence Sunday! I'm looking forward to some nice snippets in the list.

Speaking of snippets, here's mine. We're back with Rayne aka Kali, the most efficient assassin in the clandestine Corpus agency. Sent to infiltrate, bring down, and then despatch notorious Russian criminal Nikolai Grigorievskiy, Rayne didn't count on meeting the one man she has always loved, London paramedic Ash Gilfoy, her childhood best friend, on that mission. Thankfully, he didn't recognize her, but everything's going down in a spin for Rayne.

Trying her best to do her job - we saw last week how she disposed of Nikolai and Boris, his right-hand man - reality is somewhat catching up with her....

After exiting the Nice villa, Rayne has triggered an explosion inside the house, which erased all traces of her presence and the killings. Everything is going as per the plan, but suddenly, her exit is compromised when the smell of Nikolai's cologne assaults her olfactory memory...

'...
Bad, bad, bad; she should've been able to wipe out any recollection of him, the imprint of his scent that took over her olfactory system—a rookie reaction. Lots of people expected killing to be hard; it wasn't, not for those trained to take out targets, as there were techniques for blanking out the visual memory of an assassination, for adapting to the sound of gunfire, for quelling nausea and disgust when blood and entrails gushed everywhere.
No one had learned how to get rid of the smell, though, especially that of the victim, and the longer an agent stayed with the target—the more he or she got to know him—the more he could haunt that agent when taken out. No one acknowledged that a scent burned through a killer’s nose and stayed with him, like a ghostly shadow that reminded the agent of what he or she had done, with every breath. A good assassin knew how to ditch the smell and get on with life.
Usually, she could do that, effortlessly, too, but not that time—ever since Ash had walked into her world....
...'


Will Rayne aka Kali manage to work her way out of this tight spot? Police is closing in on the town, and thanks to her rookie reaction, she'd thrown her whole exit plan into jeopardy. What is she to do?
Grab your copy of Before The Morning (Corpus Brides: Book Two) and find out!

Don't forget to check these amazing peeps on the official SSS list - Jessica Subject, Siobhan Muir, Kate Warren, Jess Schira, Cara Bristol, Layna Pimentel, JM Blackman, Lila Shaw, Monica Enderle Pierce, & Samantha Paige, among many others!

Hope you're having a lovely weekend, peeps!

From Mauritius with love,

Zee

47 comments:

Alexa said...

Nice!

Jessica Subject said...

And here we see her start to break down to show her other side. I love this story!

Carmen DeSousa said...

Very nice. I love the use of scents. It is, after all, our most powerful sense. It can flash us back to a memory in a blink of an eye. Great way to incorporate it to the scene. Not only for her job, but the emotional draw on her.

patonlorraine said...

Wow! Great description. Wonderful insight into her character and her struggles. :)

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks, Alexa! Good to see you here, girl! xoxo

Zee Monodee said...

Yup, Jessica! That's where everything starts to unravel for Rayne. :) xoxo

Zee Monodee said...

Thank you, Carmen! I agree with you - a scent can trigger a memory or throw us back in time. :) xoxo

Zee Monodee said...

Thank you Lorraine! It was all about getting in her shoes and mind right then :) xoxo

Cara Bristol said...

Wow!!!! Totally fabulous the way you worked in the sense of smell. It adds such realism. My favorite six sunday post so far.

Zee Monodee said...

Aww, thank you, Cara! I wanted to make this realistic, and when I realized how smells can stay with us, I thought, why not use that here? :) xoxo

Ann Swann said...

Fantastic...especially that line about "a good assassin knew how to ditch the smell and get on with life." Very well done!

Siobhan Muir said...

Ouch. Great reminder of our olfactory senses, Zee, and how it affects us. Nicely done.

Thanks for the mention, too. :)

Kate Warren said...

Wow. His cologne haunting her is a great detail. She's going to need a new job. Maybe Ash could help her with that.

Christine Warner said...

WOW..that was intense..loved it Zee :)

Samantha Paige said...

It's been scientifically proven that scent is the greatest memory trigger there is. Whether you intended it or not, I loved how you used it. :)

Sue Ann Bowling said...

Loved the way you used the sense of smell.

Jennifer Lowery (Kamptner) said...

Awesome inner conflict!!! Loved it, Zee!

sue said...

Yes she will really have to be careful now. And I think she realises, too, that she's losing her edge. Was nice to see you on my snippet too :D

Monica Enderle Pierce said...

Brilliant use of scent! It's so often overlooked in writing, yet it's our most basic sense. I love that it's unraveling her and the trigger is her past. I'm loving this story, Zee. Loving it!

(And thanks for the call-out. I'm flattered to be in such fine company!)

Paula Martin said...

Fascinating six, especially the effects of scent, really intrigued to know what she is going to do now.

Carrie Crain (Wildcats Wife) said...

I agree with Monica. Writers (even me) are guilty of not enough scent and smells in their work. Really great job!

Lyric James said...

Enjoyed your six. Her turmoil was palpable.

J.M. Blackman said...

I love hearing how her mind works. She's very calculating, even when she's not "operating" the way she expects herself to. It's very fun to read. Stone cold killer with a lingering conscience. Love it, Zee.

Taryn Kincaid said...

Awesome use of the senses here! And best of luck with your new gig, Zee!

diannehartsock said...

You've really caught my interest with this piece! I want to know all about them.

Maryellen said...

Fantastic tension!! and great details

BL Bonita said...

Very good, Zee! How do you know so much about death and how it smells? I thought I was the only twisted one... *g*

Zee Monodee said...

Thank you, Ann! :)

Zee Monodee said...

Lol, Siobhan. Kinda gripping, innit? I kept thinking about how, when you live with someone, time and again you might remember his/her scent. Why shouldn't that be the case when an agent has been undercover in a criminal's bed? And here we were. :) XOXO

Zee Monodee said...

Kate, she is definitely going to need a new job. In fact, a little ways further down this scene, she decides to bow out of the clandestine life. Question is, though - can one leave the agency, and just walk out on them? :) xoxo

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks, Christine! xoxo

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Samantha! Yep, I did check whether scent could work that way when I was writing this one. Glad it came out this way and ye all are enjoying the ride. :) xoxo

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks, Sue Ann! :)

Zee Monodee said...

Lol. Thanks, Jennifer! xoxo

Zee Monodee said...

Sue, she's definitely realizing that she is no longer cut out for the clandestine lifestyle.
I finally got the chance to drop by ye all's blogs this time. It's been a crazy past few weeks, and I barely had time to even answer my email. :) xoxo

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Monica! Sense is definitely overlooked, and when you think we as writers should engage the reader using all 5 senses, it's obvious scent plays a big part in that deal. And lol, Rayne is definitely unraveling, because of this clash with her past. :) XOXO

Zee Monodee said...

Thank you, Paula! Things are changing, esp her perspective, now. :) xoxo

Zee Monodee said...

Lol, Carrie! I think scents are the most complex and difficult elements for us to convey in our stories, because each scenet is something inherently personal, and to be able to put that across in a way that everyone relates to it is not an easy feat. :) xoxo

Zee Monodee said...

Thank you, Lyric! :)

Zee Monodee said...

Lol, JM. She is definitely calculating, even when everything inside her is stemming from good intentions. Love that description of yours - stone-cold killer with lingering conscience. Totally Rayne! :) XOXO

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Taryn (both for the six and the job) :) xoxo

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Dianne! xoxo

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks, Maryellen! xoxo

Zee Monodee said...

Lol, B! Hmmm, I have absolutely no clue... Maybe I am twisted, too... :) XOXO

Mae Clair said...

Your character insights are always so intriguing. This was a great six. So well done!

Gem Sivad said...

I am hooked on this story through this six. Absolutely fantastic description.

Elin Gregory said...

This is super. We all know how a whiff of scent can bring a whole scene back to our minds with painful clarity but I don't think i've ever seen it used this way before.

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