Sunday, September 04, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday - Walking The Edge: Snippet #13

Hey peeps

It's a gorgeous Sunday here in Mauritius - brilliant & clear blue skies, warm sun, temps up in the seventies. We're officially going into spring, finally!

So, since it's pretty much spring here, I thought I'd start a new sequence from Walking The Edge to keep with the 'fresh' theme. This one is another action-packed scene, and it takes place a few moments after the previously featured interlude between Amelia and Gerard in the dark alleyway beside the bistro.

Gerard left her gasping for breath back there, but unbeknownst to him, Amelia has picked herself up and is closely following him in the shadows of darkened doorways and the streets around Boulevard Michelet where Gerard lives.
On the doorstep of his residence, Gerard hears the soft sound of gravel accidentally crunching under a heavy footstep, and he pauses. The area where he lives, while still relatively safe, wasn't top-notch secured as the beaux quartiers of Marseille either...

'...
Tonight is too quiet - something hung in the air, a sort of expectancy that made the hairs on his nape stand up; Not a good sign, his cop's instincts screamed. He reached for the gun he kept in the shoulder holster on his left side, pulled out his Sig Sauer, and unlatched the safety, keeping the firearm close to him.

As he turned to scan the other side of the road, something—or someone—lunged at him and knocked him into the solid garage door. Reflex kicking in, he took a deep breath to fortify himself against the stinging pain in his body, and honing his senses, he then lashed out on the side from which his opponent had assaulted him. His fist connected with a jaw and he heard a grunt - male. So it wasn't the woman from the bistro - could she have sent someone after him? ...'

More Six Sentence Sunday goodness here! Thanks for dropping by, and double thanks if you leave me a comment. :)

From Mauritius with love,

Zee

34 comments:

Jessica Subject said...

Love how calm he is even when under attack. Shows proof of his training.

A great six!

sue said...

ah you must be in austraila - spring-fall both lovely seasons. And so is this snippet - so? who attacked him?

Cate Masters said...

Excellent portrayal of his skill and senses. Makes me want to keep reading to find out who's attacking him.

Kathleen Grieve said...

Jam packed with action and suspense! Well done!

J.C. Martin said...

Great description of the suspense here! And happy spring! We're having an Indian summer here, so will enjoy it while it lasts and the cold weather kicks in...

Taryn Kincaid said...

Great tension and suspense.

Cherie Marks said...

A little bit of mystery. Spring is definitely in your blogging voice. Great six!

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Jessica - yup, his training shines through. Had to think like a seasoned cop for this one, lol. :)

Zee Monodee said...

Hey Sue
Lol, not in Australia, but in the southern hemisphere anyhow: Mauritius, southern Indian Ocean.
Hmmm, who attacked him... I'll keep the suspense going on that one for now. More next week *grin*

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Cate! I wanted to do cops justice through Gerard's portrayal, and I hope I did it right

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Kathleen! This book was my first try at suspense and action - so glad it appears I pulled it through. :)

Zee Monodee said...

Thank you J.C. Oh, I love Indian summers, they look gorgeous! You're right to enjoy it. :)

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Taryn!

Zee Monodee said...

Lol Cherie - I think the sun's been working on the bleakness in my brain after this cold, miserable winter we've had. :)

Jennifer Lowery (Kamptner) said...

You nailed the action! Great six!

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Jennifer!

Piper said...

Action packed, very spot on with it. The right amount of intensity, the right amount of suspense. Great work!

Sherry Gloag said...

Love the way you portray his instinct kicking in, and he still suspects her.

Carrie Ann Ryan said...

Ooooh - so much action in such little words. I really like your six!

Lex Valentine said...

So much action in so few words! Great!

Lindsay said...

Great descriptions of her following and him suspecting

Jay Di Meo said...

I loved the tension and the action scene - but also the fact that it wasn't her who attacked him but another man. Great six!

Cara Bristol said...

Surprise at the end. Nice job.

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Piper! These were lovely words! :)

Zee Monodee said...

Oh yeah, Sherry - she is at the forefront of his mind all the time!

Zee Monodee said...

Thank you Carrie!

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Lex!

Zee Monodee said...

Glad it caught the mood, Lindsay. :)

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Jay - I wanted a little element of surprise towards the end. :)

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks Cara!

Alix said...

Totally awesome six, so so so...did she?

Zee Monodee said...

Lol Alix! More coming next week, promise. :)

1000th.monkey said...

I love a lot of your word choices here... like, 'fortify' and when he hits the guy, the grunt is what tells him it's a male attacker.

Zee Monodee said...

Thanks 1000th Monkey! As writers, I think we should play with words and that's what I try to do with my writing, provide the best sensory experience conveyed through a string of words. :)

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